一篇英文读后感 Wonder Is On Your Hands ---Read Desert Mountain SeaWhat is difficult?Cross the big desert?Climb the high mountian?Or sail the sea alone?It may be difficult for common people.But three women show us everything is possible if you

一篇英文读后感 Wonder Is On Your Hands ---Read Desert Mountain SeaWhat is difficult?Cross the big desert?Climb the high mountian?Or sail the sea alone?It may be difficult for common people.But three women show us everything is possible if you
一篇英文读后感
Wonder Is On Your Hands ---Read Desert Mountain Sea
What is difficult?Cross the big desert?Climb the high mountian?Or sail the sea alone?It may be difficult for common people.But three women show us everything is possible if you dare to dream with their actions.
In the book Desert mountain Sea,three women really moved me.Ronbyn is one of the most bravest women that I have ever seen.First,She could make a brave decision which is gongacross desert with camels.Second she could bear the hard boss and worked hard in order to get camels.Third ,she could cross the Gibson Desert which is 640-kiolmeter longwith just camels.finally,she succeeded after she tasted all the pain .And she saw the sea which is wide and deep as her dream.

一篇英文读后感 Wonder Is On Your Hands ---Read Desert Mountain SeaWhat is difficult?Cross the big desert?Climb the high mountian?Or sail the sea alone?It may be difficult for common people.But three women show us everything is possible if you
Cross the big desert?----Crossing the big desert?
Climb the high mountian?--Climbing
Or sail the sea alone?---sailing
if you dare to dream with their actions-----if you dare to dream and take actions
In the book Desert mountain Sea,three women really moved me--中式英语
改为I was moved by the 3 women in the book Desert mountain Sea.
Ronbyn is one of the most bravest women that I have ever seen.----
最高级写错了,最勇敢the bravest
First,She could make a brave decision which is gongacross desert with camels----读着真别扭.gongacross是笔误么?
改为First,she made a brave decision to cross desert with camels.不需要从句WHICH了,太罗嗦.
finally,she succeeded after she tasted all the pain ---改为suffered all the pain.
And she saw the sea which is wide and deep as her dream---
Finally,she saw the wide and deep sea just like in her dream.就wide and deep没必要用定语从句了.
点评：总体来说,文笔通顺,语病不多,逻辑清晰.
但是,总是用中文思维造句,先想好一句中文再逐字翻译成英文的写作方法也算是初学者常见的情况,多读多写,就能改进.
另外,1234四点言之无物,有凑字数嫌疑.
我不是中学教师.

1. dream with your actions 2. In the book Desert Mountain Sea 3.She could make a brave decision which is going across the desert 4. work hard 5. 640-kilometer 5.Finally 6.as wide and deep as her dream

What is the difficulty ? Crossing the big desert ? Climbing the high mountain ? Or sailing the sea alone ? It may be difficult for common people . But there are three women showing us everything is po...

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What is the difficulty ? Crossing the big desert ? Climbing the high mountain ? Or sailing the sea alone ? It may be difficult for common people . But there are three women showing us everything is possible if you dare to dream with your actions .
In the book of Desert Mountain Sea, I am really moved by the three women . Ronbyn is one of the most bravest women whom I have ever seen . Firstly , she could make a brave dicision which is going across desert with camels . the second she could bear the hard boss and work hard in order to get camels. The third, she could cross the Gibson Desert which is 640-kilometer long with only camels . Finally, she succeeded after she had tried all pain. And she saw the sea which is wide and deep as her dream .
二楼楼主，good

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