帮忙看下英语作文的语法什么有没有错..There is a group of people in the society.They are Lesbian.They are called LES for short.LES is a kind of homosexual.Lesbian are delicate like the fragile glass babies.Because there are many people

帮忙看下英语作文的语法什么有没有错..There is a group of people in the society.They are Lesbian.They are called LES for short.LES is a kind of homosexual.Lesbian are delicate like the fragile glass babies.Because there are many people
帮忙看下英语作文的语法什么有没有错..
There is a group of people in the society.They are Lesbian.They are called LES for short.LES is a kind of homosexual.Lesbian are delicate like the fragile glass babies.Because there are many people have some prejudice to LES.They think someone become LES have a bad mental health.So those people have a nose for LES.And they often look down upon LES or tease LES.It also make LES be live surrounded by rumour.
I'm a LES,too.I suspect LES is ordinary.We aren't lose our sense.We just have a different sexual tendency from other people.We are guiltless.There is no law to ban girl to fall in love with girl.And our love is clarified,too.We are eager to be understand.
Last but not least,we have ourselves' living range.In this district,if you can't subscribe to us,please don't be opposed to us and add you own commentary to us.
We are LES.We are glass babies!

帮忙看下英语作文的语法什么有没有错..There is a group of people in the society.They are Lesbian.They are called LES for short.LES is a kind of homosexual.Lesbian are delicate like the fragile glass babies.Because there are many people
There is a group of people in the society.They are Lesbian,*and they are called LES for short.LES is a kind of homosexual.Lesbians are delicate like the fragile glass babies because there are many people‘ having’some prejudice to LES.They think someone who become LES have a ’poor‘ mental health,‘so’ these people have a nose for LES.‘In addition’,they often look down upon LES or tease them which（cause and effect) make LES live and surround by rumor.
I'm a LES,too.I suspect LES is ordinary.We aren't losing our sense.We just have a different sexual tendency from other people.We are guiltless.There is no law to ban girl to fall in love with girl,and our love is clarified,too.We are eager to be understand.
Last but not least,we have ourselves' living range.In this district,if you can't subscribe to us,please don't be opposed to us and add you own commentary' on' us.
We are LES.We are glass babies!
没有什么大的错误·意见而已~
（尽量不由用‘and,because’来开一个句子

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应该是poor mental health